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in the second sentence, “[…] are concerned that the transformation that is occurring in our society may even spell out the death of the book and a decline in the amount of meaningful literature being created.” The author is referencing a book but does not make it clear that he is talking about “The Gutenberg Elegies” or literal books themselves. could strengthen the idea of what Sven Birkerts argument is.
Also using the words “outraged” and “troubled” before saying the authors name draws conclusions on how the authors feel before reading the text. Could be seen was gathering a hypothesis because of an opinion. It doesn’t represent who the authors are.
Play. An instrument to play with unfathomable quantity of textual material. How might we rethink research and brainstorming and reading as ‘playing’?
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Tracking terms/keywords: specialization/specialties is used 5 times in this paragraph alone. Definitely on Berry’s mind as a concern.
This is a relatable paragraph, I saw this a lot while I was in high school. People are trying to find the right crowd to be apart of, and to some extent they are even changing who they are to be accepted, and to meet these “requirements” to fit into a group. As a young teenager there is a lot of pressure to fit in. There tends to be a gap between people who care about their academic and those who are less focused on their performance in school. However in paragraph 37 it talks about how this gap is being closed through sports despite individual differences.
I agree with the idea that you do not need to be book smart in order to be an intellectual. Having these “streets smarts” are almost as much or more important in the real world than knowing about history of the world. Also, I believe that being book smart is not just being smart, it is a form of repetition that anyone can learn if they study enough. Being intellectually street smart has more value.
I actually find this paragraph interesting because I read huckleberry Finn in 9th grade. I remember reading Huckleberry Finn and thinking about how smart and resourceful he was for just a kid even though he was illiterate. This book is a great case of hidden intellectualism that can help school students understand the concept of hidden intellectualism.
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Overall, I think the authors essay is very strong. The mentors aligned with the authors argument and evidence was accurately backed up with sufficient reasoning. However, my main critique would be proper grammar (ex. sentence 2) Checking this essay, and specifically this concluding paragraph, through Grammarly would improve this essay.
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